Wings of Steel

September 17, 2008

Heaven’s a Lie: Act X

Filed under: Chapter Nine — Mao @ 2:54 am

“Forgive me, Era Laszael…” Ssedot whispered, her vision fading, all the energy that had resided in her body drained. Again she had been a tool, again she had allowed herself to be used… but this time would be the last.

She could only hope for forgiveness.

You’re stumbling in the dark…

Laszael lost her concentration, falling into the pond with a small splash. She recovered, though could not deny the feeling that shook her to her core. Death. It tightened her heart and made her large eyes water. A misuse of power… but it was too late.

It was too late.

You’re stumbling in the dark.

28 Comments

  1. Wow. You did an AWESOME job setting tone for this act. It’s not often that I can actually FEEL the story I’m reading, and I felt this. It was perfect. I think this has been my favorite so far.

    I can’t wait to see what happens next.

    Thanks! I was really worried it wouldn’t work, but I’m glad that it did.

    Comment by Erin — September 17, 2008 @ 3:23 am

  2. ARGH MAO!!!! Stop leaving me in such SUSPENSE!!!! What happens? Why did Christian go ‘over to the dark side’? Who is Ssedot {As I forgot!}? When will Sanctus Unus come back? Where IS Christian?

    WHY MUST YOU TORMENT ME SO!!!!!!

    Mao, you’re killing me!! I can’t wait ’til next week to know! I’ll die of suspense!

    Does Christian get hurt? Is Beryl okay? Where’d Valerie go?

    *takes a deep breath* I think I’ll just re-read the act now…

    Ssedot is one of Laszael’s people. She and the others were captured by Elesuh and Xavier. Unfortunately, Ssedot was used for Samaria’s little plan. That and the rest will be explained more in the final chapter.

    Comment by Dragongirl — September 17, 2008 @ 4:22 am

  3. *sniff* Oh no, I hope I didn’t read this Act properly and I’m not thinking what I’m thinking.

    But what an awesome Act though, very intense. ‘Feathers on my breath’, loved that line. Very poetic :)

    I’m very intrigued as to what this means, and the consequences that will follow.

    The song really seemed to fit what was going on. And I wanted to use it differently. :) Thanks!

    Comment by Taryn — September 17, 2008 @ 4:30 am

  4. Ok,what was happening there? I must be dumbed from all the midnight oil i’m burning….

    It was just showing where everyone was when Christian did what he did. It’ll be explained further in the last chapter.

    Comment by karen — September 17, 2008 @ 7:40 am

  5. OMG!!! Chaos everywhere you look at!!!
    I knew Onael’s daughter was behind it all… Stupid girl, it looks like she has open the doors to hell even Onael is worried and thinking of death!!! What has she done?

    That picture of Beryl laying on the floor was heartbreaking, poor Beryl never had she looked so vulnerable like now… not even when she was all drunk and drugged… I hope the baby and Beryl are ok.

    And I’m begging, please please don’t let stupid Nicolas mess up things this time, I’m a sucker for happy endings, open endings, etc. but it would hurt (and I mean it) to see Beryl or the baby die…

    If Nicolas messes up everything again, please do let Melissande kill him, I will help her if you want! give her ideas to torture him!!! LOL

    And that picture of Laszael in the pond is beautiful! She is crying to, what is coming is big, isn’t it?

    Great chapter Mao! Beautiful dark enigmatic shots like always and the writing is just fantastic!

    ps. I loved the lyrics you use all thru this chapter, they go perfect with the story.

    Bravo!

    I don’t think Melissande will let Nicolas mess up, but when they run into Christian, there might be some problems! Christian did say if he saw Nicolas, he’d kill him for what he did to Valerie (tried to kill her). Thanks! I’m really glad this Act worked, I was worried about it.

    Comment by sandybvv — September 17, 2008 @ 8:40 am

  6. Oooh, dark and stuff. So that was Samaria, huh? Nic must’ve told her a whole lot for her to pull off a hoax that big. Death? What’s all this talk about death? What happened? I don’t want anybody to die! And still not an answer in sight. I sincerely hope, for the sake of my sanity, that I start getting some answers in chapter 10, which is next, right?

    Yeah, no worries. Answers in the last chapter, but don’t expect them all to be obvious. ;) Ssedot is dying, Samaria drained all of her power.

    Comment by Fini — September 17, 2008 @ 9:24 am

  7. *long distance huggles* I hope you feel better soon Mao
    Oy Christian .. such a desperate move ..
    Samaria?! OMG I so did not see that coming … but should have.. omg that makes sense.. but what is she up to? Hmmm..
    OMG that had a very profound affect. Poor Beryl .. first time in a long time that i felt bad for her .. maybe its the baby i worry for .. ya that must be it.
    *grins* I always did like Melissande … thats right sexy Nicolas, dont cross your big sis!
    Gah! Death .. everyone is affected by this Christian / Samaria thing!!
    *bounces on the edge* thats a great update Mao, it was very very good!

    Thanks! I am trying to edit these comments coherently, but I apologize if anything is off, LOL! Yeah, Christian doing what he did caused a lot of ripples, but we’ll find out why he did it soon enough.

    Comment by ruby — September 17, 2008 @ 10:53 am

  8. Mao!!!! I hate it when you do this. What has Christian done?! What did Samaria’s fresh self do? And the baby! ARGH!

    Is Onael going to kill her own daughter? That’s cold.

    She sure wants to, because what Samaria did was very, very stupid. Christian is capable of killing Onael and Onael is worried that Sanctus Unus’ plan is to kill her.

    Comment by Josh — September 17, 2008 @ 11:06 am

  9. You should smack me for reading this before I’ve finished with all the other Chapters. I’m about half way through ‘em now, and jumped in my seat when I saw Nicolas. (The beginning and middle has made me wish he’d do a 360 again and come back to the good side! I gotta finish the rest of the back-story!!)

    Anywho… I’m all scared now, thank you very much. Whatever Christian did makes me freaking nervous! Don’t make me hate you, Christian! LOL

    Christian did what he did for a reason. We’ll find that out… and then you can decide. As for Nicolas, he’s never going to be good, just like Melissande won’t ever be, but we’ll see if he survives his reunion with Christian.

    Comment by JMW — September 17, 2008 @ 11:55 am

  10. I had to put the song on while I read this and I’m glad I did. It fits the events. What in the hell have they done now?

    Ooh, yes! I love this song, and it’s great to listen to as you read. :D

    Comment by E. Black — September 17, 2008 @ 1:21 pm

  11. so..wait..
    Who’s gonna die? Beryl or the baby? I doubt Christian would allow Beryl to die…so did he like…let the baby die? But then again, Beryl would never want to talk to him again if he let their baby die….

    BTW…why is Melissande and Nicolas oblivious to the shift? Does this have something to do with “the plan”?

    Im so loooost! Next update, please!

    Eva, you may be on to something, even if you think you’re lost. I’ll leave you to figure out what exactly that is, though. Melissande and Nicolas aren’t, that’s why they are hurrying. :)

    Comment by Eva — September 17, 2008 @ 2:02 pm

  12. Christian, I swear to god. YOU are a fucking dumbass. Didn’t we figure out two or three episodes ago that the thing was a trick, not right, et cetera and so forth? Then WHY did you do exactly what it wanted?

    Dumbass.

    PS: Mao – rockin’ episode, as usual, even if I *do* want to kick the shit out of Christian.

    Haha, I was waiting for this kind of reaction! Christian didn’t do what he did without a very good reason. Unfortunately, you’ll have to wait and figure out what that is. But you should always remember the motive behind Christian’s actions and what he does. Thanks! :D

    Comment by Arkali — September 17, 2008 @ 2:40 pm

  13. Once more, ARRGHHHH!!! As Sesana said, what has Christian done? I’m in two minds whether it has anything to do with SU’s plan involving Melissande, or if it’s Samaria’s plot. Whoever’s behind it, it’s certainly shaken Onael up – even an evil Era isn’t shockproof! The spawn she referred to could be Christian or Samaria, as both of them are vampire/Era spawn, so I guess it’s an open question for the moment.

    Beryl or Christian junior is safe for a while longer, which is good, but it’s not looking good for poor Laszael :( And Ssedot was involved somehow? I wonder what’s happening to Freya and her clan while all this is going on? It’s affecting both realms, but maybe some areas are more negatively affected depending on who’s responsible.

    Great ending to a chapter that’s had everything, and will keep us guessing until Chapter 10 starts. Bravo Mao! :)

    Thanks! As for what Christian is done, it has nothing to do with Sanctus Unus’ plan. In fact, it may be the opposite. But we have yet to find that out. Don’t worry, all will be answered in the final chapter. ;) Ssedot was forced to do Samaria’s bidding. It’s the only way Samaria could get into Christian’s head. Freya and co. are in lockup at Onael’s.

    Comment by Tanya — September 17, 2008 @ 3:22 pm

  14. Whoa! What is Christian doing?
    Oh and hi, I’ve been reading KiD and WoS for a while now but never decided to comment before I’d catch up. Well now I have and I think your writing is absolutely B-R-I-L-L-I-A-N-T! No bad words to describe it!
    Also, I hope that Christian doesn’t become an enemy…Eeek! :( :S…

    Hi there! Thanks, I’m glad you’ve enjoyed it.

    Comment by Una — September 17, 2008 @ 3:35 pm

  15. WTF just happened….

    Hehe, you will see, don’t worry!

    Comment by Tiana — September 17, 2008 @ 4:21 pm

  16. DONT U DARE KILL OFF CHRISTIAN!

    Ack, no threats! :b

    Comment by Phil — September 17, 2008 @ 7:29 pm

  17. WTH!!!
    Oh no you didn’t!
    What..!?
    Awww Come on!
    *dies*
    *_*

    LOL! Poor Tiffany, hang in there!

    Comment by Tiffany — September 17, 2008 @ 7:56 pm

  18. Ok I am thoroughly speechless,

    What did Samaria do, unless this is eventually all part of Sanctus Una’s plan…

    And I have really grown fond of Melissande, she is so forthright and strong. Love how she threatens to kill Nicholas herself if he messes up.

    Now what was Christian thinking? Going against everything he knew was wrong in his heart and is Beryl and the Baby ok???

    The only thing I can imagine is that Samaria’s mind trick told him harm would come to Beryl if he didn’t follow through.

    Great Update, will wait impatiently until next week…

    Samaria didn’t factor in on Sanctus Unus’ plan at all because Sanctus Unus didn’t know about her until the end of Reflection. That was the unforeseen variable no one anticipated. ;) And that’s a VERY good assumption as to Christian’s motives. We know everything he does, he does for Beryl. Thanks!

    Comment by Cheripye822 — September 17, 2008 @ 9:23 pm

  19. Ok so I read this yesterday and was in too much of a shock to respond. I still can’t think straight right now. I knew Samaria had something to do with this and Christian (my poor Christian)is just doing what he thinks is best. I just wished he would have confided in Beryl and they could have worked together.

    You’re right, Christian is just doing what he thinks he has to. It would have to be pretty big for him to be making such a brash choice. Unfortunately, Beryl and Christian just couldn’t do that, because their fates aren’t meant to be known to the other.

    Comment by Detris — September 18, 2008 @ 12:20 pm

  20. Oh my…this was a deeply effective and foreboding act. I have to wonder what “stupid spawn” Onael refers to, hers or Eckhard’s. Knowing that Christian will act based on his feelings for Beryl, this could not have been part of the plan and yet I cannot imagine Sanctus Unus would not have anticipated something like this perhaps. I also believe Christian will have a plan, a motive for doing this beyond the obvious. He knew it was a trick, a trap. How Melissande and Nicholas will factor in is yet another wild card in the grand scheme.

    The shift is felt on both sides but which way did the power turn? I still think it is on the side of good but no one is going to come out unscathed.

    Brilliant conclusion to this chapter Mao. I am on the edge of my chair breathless for more.

    Thanks, Gayl! I’m glad it worked. As for Onael, she was referring to Samaria. I guess I should have made that clearer, oops! You’re right, regardless as to where the shift went, no one is getting out of this without some hurt. There’s plenty of that forthcoming…

    Comment by Gayl — September 18, 2008 @ 8:59 pm

  21. Samarina does know how to play Christian, I’m still really curious what she was hoping to do with him once she got him. Whatever it was, its not looking like she is going to have the chance to see it through. I know you are saying it wasn’t part of the plan, but would it have been totally unexpected by Sanctus Unus that Christian would act so rashly on Beryl’s behalf? And Laszael, is that her sensing Ssedot dying, or another death? And are Melissande and Nicolas running towards the trouble? It must be, he wouldn’t be complaining if they were trying to get away. Ack!

    Indeed! But I don’t think she knows how to control him. She may think she can, but yeah. You’re right about Sanctus Unus. We can assume that’s why Melissande is where she is. ;) I can’t get anything past you!

    Comment by goodbye_sun — September 19, 2008 @ 3:31 am

  22. Ah ….. Christian, Christian. I know I was disappointed in him last time but I am beginning to think that he’s being self sacrificing. However, I really don’t think Beryl will be as understanding.

    Whatever he’s done, it must be bad for Onael to want to flee. Curiouser and Curiouser.

    I am biting my nails to see what happens.

    I have no idea why feedblitz didn’t send you the update, argh! You’re right, Beryl won’t understand, because what he did was stupid. LOL!

    Comment by theseventhmuse/Ysbal — September 19, 2008 @ 8:07 pm

  23. … Dude.. I just read 18 acts in a row and… woah… woooooooah. I cried a bit when Beryl and Christian reunited, and Valerie is so pretty, and this chapter, was like woah; it blew me away man.
    I had an inkling it was Samaria’s work, like she was giving Christian those visions, I wonder why she’s so obsessed with him… hmmm ahhhh, I don’t want Christian to diiie, I hope he comes out ok, in fact, I hope he didn’t screw everything up too much T_T, this is what love does to you kids, it makes you do stupid things. Beryl doesn’t LOOK very pregnant… :S I thought she’d go the big belly way, and it keeps saying she’s very pregnant, but everytime I see her, she’s as flat as a pancake… tummywise not boobywise.

    18 in a row? Wow! As for Beryl, she’s pregnant and you can see it, but only when she’s sideways. She’s got the biggest available belly for The Sims 2. Haha and you’re right, love does make you stupid!

    Comment by Shirley — September 20, 2008 @ 12:25 am

  24. one of the best updates ever. where are melissande and nicolas trying to get to? i hope christian doesnt kill nicolas. maybe melissande will defend him?

    where did you get melissandes hair from?

    awesome update

    I’m pretty sure that Melissande’s hair is from Raonjena sims. Or however you spell it. Thanks!

    Comment by Alex — September 20, 2008 @ 6:54 pm

  25. Oh… oh this is bad. What the heck is Christian about to do? Is he not thinking about his future daddydom???

    …wait… is he thinking about his future daddydom? DOES THIS HAVE ANYTHING TO DO WITH THE BABY?

    oh goodness.

    Haha, that’s a good question, but the baby is fine… so far. ;)

    Comment by Veron — September 22, 2008 @ 5:50 pm

  26. Wow. My mind is Officially Blown. Wow.

    Hooray! I blew your mind, now I feel successful. :D

    Comment by Beverly — September 22, 2008 @ 9:26 pm

  27. Wow… that one act seems to have shaken everything up irreparably. What is going to happen now?! I’m off to find out.

    Oh, definitely. Shit has hit the fan, no doubt!

    Comment by Verity — May 2, 2009 @ 12:46 pm

  28. Oh, this was excellent! Teardrop worked really well to set the tone for this act, I think.

    Thanks! I was dubious about it, but it turned out working really well.

    Comment by Carla — January 4, 2010 @ 12:25 am

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